This version is a bit of a homebrew.
Happy new year Morango!
I came across this on my travels yesterday ... looks very similar to how you've got it going and may be of interest.
Sounds like a step in the right direction! The dynamics will come with ease of playing so not too important while certain things are still new.
I should have explained T= thumb, m=middle finger and i=index finger of picking hand. You're currently using your index finger for the notes on beats 2 and 4 of the section in question. Although the notes are the same, compare the feel of that with what you get when using the thumb for beats 2 & 4 instead.
This alternating-thumb style is what's often referred to as "Travis picking". I did a 2 minute primer on the easiest way to get a basic version of this working a while back ...
Don't feel obliged to keep recording full versions of anything ... that can soon start feeling like a real chore. What's of interest are the problem sections.
A good next step might be to record this Travis picked bar in isolation looping back into itself repeatedly, ideally in time with a metronome or backing track and to do the same with the more authentic "finger-strummed" version.
We're aiming to get them both up to performance speed (192bpm) and higher (to allow a comfort zone). If you can print out the sheet below you can keep a track of your top speed on each.
Let's say our target speed is 220bpm. What are your current top speeds for these two patterns?
Ah yeah, I ignored the letters and assumed I keep the order of the fingers the same.
I think the recording is played at 96bpm or maybe 92, and I practised the last version at 112bpm.
See what you make of this ... I've a feeling it won't take you long to master either approach!
Travis version. I'm frustrated with the dynamics, or lack thereof. I need to work on that.
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You've done the hard work and that all sounds pretty good! I'd say it's only missing the rhythmic push in the main section which I've drawn up here and can be practised in complete isolation until it's up to speed ...
How much sense does this make? It will make a good section to examine deeper here if you have any problems with it!